09-01-2020, 01:43 AM
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Hi duke,
wonder if you might achieve more with less,
We do care, you know.
And though we won’t
post signs about it
this is a nice place
a beautiful, beloved
peaceful place, so,
an offering, four
words for you:
see suburbia and die.
The lecturing/hectoring tone of the opening three verses seems self-defeating.
If it is a reply to BLM etc, shame you couldn't get those four words down to three.
I don't think the title helps, in terms of clarity, though were the final line the title
(in Latin or otherwise), and a final three word line played of both it and BLM then ...
Best, Knot
.
Hi duke,
wonder if you might achieve more with less,
We do care, you know.
And though we won’t
post signs about it
this is a nice place
a beautiful, beloved
peaceful place, so,
an offering, four
words for you:
see suburbia and die.
The lecturing/hectoring tone of the opening three verses seems self-defeating.
If it is a reply to BLM etc, shame you couldn't get those four words down to three.
I don't think the title helps, in terms of clarity, though were the final line the title
(in Latin or otherwise), and a final three word line played of both it and BLM then ...
Best, Knot
.