08-26-2020, 10:55 PM
That no one responds to your poem justifies it. Gives it merit. I am Nobody, so I have time. Now that you've said It, Say something else. This is a good introduction to the world you're living in, it's a fair complaint. What you want is more than a complaint, a leap into poetry, a justification of the ground you want to walk.
What is it that needs to be understood? That you're so passionate about? Describe it. Then embellish it so that it's valuable for even those who don't understand it. It doesn't need to be justified to you, and if you make a good poem, it won't need to be justified.
Your last line has the most poetry in it, people who don't look up. You can try centering a symbol and figurative situation around that.
Notice how many Is are there. I know the poem is expressing neediness and the contradiction, show more of the contradiction. Rage and show the targets of the rage. The I is seeing things the poem, as it is, doesn't see.
What is it that needs to be understood? That you're so passionate about? Describe it. Then embellish it so that it's valuable for even those who don't understand it. It doesn't need to be justified to you, and if you make a good poem, it won't need to be justified.
Your last line has the most poetry in it, people who don't look up. You can try centering a symbol and figurative situation around that.
Notice how many Is are there. I know the poem is expressing neediness and the contradiction, show more of the contradiction. Rage and show the targets of the rage. The I is seeing things the poem, as it is, doesn't see.