08-18-2020, 12:27 AM
There are a lot of clunky things in the poem that need to be fixed. While I like the internal rhyme of “zoom” and “Classroom”, I do not like rhyming “room” with “Classroom” as two end rhymes. The adjective “pesky” weakens the line it is in. “we wash real good” is improper grammar. “Wear a mask is what the experts say” is improper syntax and is a dead giveaway that the rhyme is dictating the poem instead of the other way around. The proper syntax is “The experts say to wear a mask.” “each and every day” is an unnecessary add-on that is obviously added for no other purpose than forced rhyming. Same with “it’s time to stand tall” (it’s disconnected from “being kind to others” and is an obvious add-on).