08-14-2020, 08:54 AM
Made some changes here.
dukealien,
I posted it in mild/moderate critique, but I always encourage thorough feedback on everything I post on here really. That's not to say your input wasn't thorough though.
As for your comments, it seems like some of your issues (namely in the title) lie in the poem's messages. That's okay, but I won't compromise the poem's concept to agree with my audience's beliefs. In fact, I'm glad those were your issues and you stated them because that shows that I've communicated my messages somewhat competently.
Thank you for your comments and I'm also glad you were able to get so much out of it as far as what has been going on in Beirut, Spokane, Hong Kong, etc. Admittedly, I'm not aware of the current events in Spokane so I'm gonna do some googling.
Alex
dukealien,
I posted it in mild/moderate critique, but I always encourage thorough feedback on everything I post on here really. That's not to say your input wasn't thorough though.
As for your comments, it seems like some of your issues (namely in the title) lie in the poem's messages. That's okay, but I won't compromise the poem's concept to agree with my audience's beliefs. In fact, I'm glad those were your issues and you stated them because that shows that I've communicated my messages somewhat competently.
Thank you for your comments and I'm also glad you were able to get so much out of it as far as what has been going on in Beirut, Spokane, Hong Kong, etc. Admittedly, I'm not aware of the current events in Spokane so I'm gonna do some googling.
Alex