De profundis (final)

[busker]

final edit posted

Famous last words.

Hi Busker,
not that keen on 'tidy sea', and you might still consider some trimming.


De profundis

Darling boy, whose lips are summer
Sangiovese, dawn light tangling
in your hair, as in a wood

As In my dreams, a Tuscan sun
alights on sea. a boat some men.
Red, malachite and gold the day.

Their haloed heads, golden hay
They youthful leap into a tidy the sea,
(shame about 'into' twice)
each as supple as a wave

and I sink into down to depths.
where Cranes are wheeling overhead.


Regards, Not


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:-)
In a previous desk job, we never named any .docx file "final" anything. Even a report out, to be published to the wide world, would still be "Draft Report xxx.docx". That said, the edit I posted was one that came closest to what I had originally intended.
But thanks for your feedback.