08-05-2020, 12:14 AM
Mantis: A Fable (edit 3)
The harshest discipline will not alter
an evil person, their base nature
Consider how the mantis, once a mortal
man, prophet, whited sepulchre
a fortune teller unfulfilled
with courtship cast his covetous eyes
then begs for forgiveness
His victims prayed to the god who enraged
remade Him--a divine metamorphosis
into the bug we know today, the praying mantis.
And, despite divine condemnation
to suffer decapitation during copulation,
knowing this the mantis has not changed his ways
Well as long as you don't mind I guess I could see if I could find this a home somewhere. I like it very much. Thanks for all the rewrites. I had the ending in mind when I conceived the piece and had written the last line first so I will have to sit on it awhile before changing the ending. I was really adamant about the character arc being this way.
The harshest discipline will not alter
an evil person, their base nature
Consider how the mantis, once a mortal
man, prophet, whited sepulchre
a fortune teller unfulfilled
with courtship cast his covetous eyes
then begs for forgiveness
His victims prayed to the god who enraged
remade Him--a divine metamorphosis
into the bug we know today, the praying mantis.
And, despite divine condemnation
to suffer decapitation during copulation,
knowing this the mantis has not changed his ways
Well as long as you don't mind I guess I could see if I could find this a home somewhere. I like it very much. Thanks for all the rewrites. I had the ending in mind when I conceived the piece and had written the last line first so I will have to sit on it awhile before changing the ending. I was really adamant about the character arc being this way.