08-04-2020, 03:20 AM
I always love a good energy related poem. This is one.
But I didn't much care for the banality of:
"each confirming that its host
is drawing juice."
I think the poem is better off without the above lines, which doesn't convey any information that is not implied anyway.
"Constellations" as a title brings to mind Ted Kooser's 'Flying at night'. That's just to me, though. But it's a nice if unintended allusion.
https://poets.org/poem/flying-night
But I didn't much care for the banality of:
"each confirming that its host
is drawing juice."
I think the poem is better off without the above lines, which doesn't convey any information that is not implied anyway.
"Constellations" as a title brings to mind Ted Kooser's 'Flying at night'. That's just to me, though. But it's a nice if unintended allusion.
https://poets.org/poem/flying-night