08-02-2020, 11:54 PM
(07-31-2020, 12:11 AM)Torkelburger Wrote: Sunshine, then dark clouds--I wish all poems were this short. I like it. Although, it is pretty cliche, good weather—bad weather—good weather, and it doesn't do much else with that sentiment; but, I think that's why I like it, it cuts the concept back to its root. It's not trying to dress this familiar idea up in flowery language and tediously drawn-out metaphors. And that simple directness makes you forget you've probably heard it a million times before.
Slanted rain, thunder, lightning.
Then, sunshine again.
Adam DH Torkelson
Having said that, I do agree with Busker that it has too much going on to be Haiku.
