Division

[Valerie Please]

Oh that is a diabolically clever title! (And yes, you have caught the subtext beautifully. The poem started as kind of a jocular reply to the question "What is one divided by zero, and apparently the answer is "all of my dirty laundry.")

I appreciate the attention to subtle changes to word position that you suggest and find them helpful. Clearly you know how to add polish. Thank you for taking the time to read and give me feedback!

Hi, I realize this isn't in a critique forum but I'll pass on some thoughts that you can either use or ignore.

Again there is a lot of subjectivity in what I'm going to say. Let's start here though. I really like this. So, filter what I say through the lens of I like this.

I'm not sure if your line lengths are helping you as short as they are. I also think that longer line lengths would serve you when you pair them next to much shorter ones as it would show more division. Consider also not capitalizing each line and just capitalize along sentences. That is a preference again not a mandate. Notes below

Division 
Division doesn’t care --for a short line this still works well as  a first line. I think though I would consider combining L1 and L2 and ending on whole.
"Division doesn't care about the whole."
About the whole.
Division cares about--This however works as a short line because it leads into the three lines below.
The incision 
The estrangement --once we get here it shifts from clinical math to possibly relational--like that
The divorce
Even if there were--I would consider combining these two lines ending with "not"
Something left not
Burning
Imploded
Ruined....
Division can’t see it.
As far as Division is concerned
It’s the act of undoing--slight edit suggestion on these two lines: "the act of undoing is doing" 
that is doing.
Division is the grey man
methodically measuring
the degrees of separation.--instead of the degrees, maybe each degree. It feels more methodical.

Again, love the idea behind this. Final thought, the title Division is pretty bland. Titles work well when they play opposite to the tone of the poem. If the title is basic sounding the poem should be explosive. If the title is explosive the poem should be subtle. Again, just a preference. So, for instance not trying to give subtext that the poem may not have--just for illustration. Division could be replaced by:

"After my Father's Affair"


Just some thoughts hope they are helpful.

Best,

Todd