Division

[Valerie Please]

I think the poem is good. But that's not what I'm here for.



"I'm not sure if Line 12 helps or hurts the poem . . ."



Line 12: Division can’t see I      t.





"getting between each individual and the cross"



                                                     — me











             I'm an expert chess player who's never played chess in serious competition before. 



                   I'm a drunk who likes fuckin with people.





I know you spelled 'too' wrong . . .         "black and white is a great way to look like you’re not trying to hard. “I just woke up pretentious.” Is it possible that red is trying to hard?"     — you  . . .    just as a gambit to get me mixed up in your game . . .



but as Chuck Manson said , : I was in your game be fore you was playin it.









I don't see anything at all wrong with your poem. And I can never be sure who's jiving along with me, and who's upset. 

But I'll tell you this:     Your poem is a good poem. It's in the For Fun section. And my idea of fun is being unsure if you're for real or not. Plus all the time it took me to type this due to my lack of computer skills. 


It deleted everything twice, and I had to(o) repeat myself for the first time . . . unless.

Wait a minute.

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I waited a minute, but somebody sent me a Private Message.              So it might take longer than a minute. Depending on what the Private Message

Actually, you’re wrong. My “to” wasn’t a spelling error, it was an error in usage. It’s supposed to be an adverb, and you’re supposed to be in a jewel tone, whether your in mourning or not. 

But, no, if it isn’t fun, what’s the point of any of it? 

Anyway; jewel tones. Get on that, ok?