Division
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(07-17-2020, 08:52 PM)Valerie Please Wrote:  Division 
Division doesn’t care 
About the whole.
Division cares about
The incision 
The estrangement 
The divorce
Even if there were
Something left not
Burning
Imploded
Ruined....
Division can’t see it.
As far as Division is concerned
It’s the act of undoing 
that is doing.
Division is the grey man
methodically measuring
the degrees of separation.
Very much enjoyed. For me the poem would benefit from a few formatting tweaks, but my ideas on presentation aren't universal and the poem stands up just fine as it is. I'm not sure if Line 12 helps or hurts the poem and since this is in "fun", I won't dwell on it too long. Thanks for posting.
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Division - by Valerie Please - 07-17-2020, 08:52 PM
RE: Division - by rowens - 07-18-2020, 02:53 AM
RE: Division - by Valerie Please - 07-18-2020, 03:32 AM
RE: Division - by rowens - 07-18-2020, 03:36 AM
RE: Division - by Valerie Please - 07-18-2020, 11:06 PM
RE: Division - by Tiger the Lion - 07-20-2020, 04:56 AM
RE: Division - by Tiger the Lion - 07-18-2020, 01:33 PM
RE: Division - by rowens - 07-19-2020, 12:31 PM
RE: Division - by Valerie Please - 07-19-2020, 05:12 PM
RE: Division - by rowens - 07-19-2020, 01:04 PM
RE: Division - by rowens - 07-19-2020, 10:41 PM
RE: Division - by busker - 07-20-2020, 05:31 AM
RE: Division - by Todd - 07-21-2020, 01:06 AM
RE: Division - by Valerie Please - 07-21-2020, 09:24 AM
RE: Division - by Exit - 07-21-2020, 02:15 PM



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