The Whistling Wind

[Exit]

I appreciate all of the critique given.

The Whistling Wind —this is cliche, although I appreciate it is part of the refrain so it's tempting to use it as the title. Maybe use the whole line...

The whistling wind sounds like you—I actually really like the rhythm of this refrain and the follow on metaphors are good. However, the particular simile doesn't quite work for me. I assume (maybe wrongly) this is about a person and that person is gone and you miss them, broadly speaking. And it strikes me as somewhat unflattering to say they sound like the whistling wind, which is possibly the most irritating sound on earth. I would have gone for "the whistling wind reminds me of you". And even though this is even more of a cliche, it sounds smoother and less jarring against the rest of the poem.
I lay at dawn and listen
The whistling wind sounds like you
Slowly through the crevasses of my window
The whistling wind sounds like you
My neighbour wants to get it fixed
The whistling wind sounds like you
I sometimes try to muffle the sound—I wouldn't advise using the word "sound" outside of the refrain. It sounds awkward. Why not just "I sometimes try to muffle it"?
The whistling wind sounds like you
It never stays that way for long
The whistling wind sounds like you
The tone is audible throughout the building
The whistling wind sounds like you
I can almost hear it down the laneway
The whistling wind sounds like you
In the morning, everything sounds like it...—I would just end it here without the ellipses.

I don't mind.

I think this is a good little poem. It's relatively simple, and not in a bad way. It communicates clearly yet poetically. It isn't abstruse but takes a specific thing and makes it generalisable. Thank you for sharing it.