The Least of These

The Least of These - Edit3

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06-10-2020, 11:20 AM

Hey duke- Don't feel too bad, there are always more roaches...

I would suggest further tightening, such as eliminating " for it" since it would emphasize the line break into "to climb". More attention to other breaks would also help.
I do like poems/observations of otherwise mundane things. Thanks... Mark

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The Least of These - Edit3 - by dukealien - 05-25-2020, 05:59 AM

RE: The Least of These - by Knot - 05-25-2020, 08:15 PM

RE: The Least of These - Edit - by dukealien - 05-27-2020, 10:46 AM

RE: The Least of These - Edit - by Knot - 05-27-2020, 07:07 PM

RE: The Least of These - Edit - by dukealien - 05-27-2020, 10:31 PM

RE: The Least of These - Edit - by Wjames - 06-01-2020, 10:56 AM

RE: The Least of These - Edit2 - by dukealien - 06-09-2020, 05:09 AM

RE: The Least of These - Edit2 - by Mark A Becker - 06-10-2020, 11:20 AM

RE: The Least of These - Edit2 - by dukealien - 06-14-2020, 05:45 AM

RE: The Least of These - Edit3 - by penneddown - 06-14-2020, 07:01 PM

RE: The Least of These - Edit3 - by dukealien - 06-15-2020, 04:22 AM

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