Demons

[whyelliswhy]

"And every grin was fake
And every sob and shake
Were lies"

I don't understand the logic behind this one. If grins are fake, why are sobs and shakes lies?

"And I would wish that I could die"

Cliche. Maybe indicate death in a different way, such as "The tried rope knows enough to cry." But also, cliche.

"I would claw away my hide
And flay this fake face to pay
Whatever god keeps my guilt to cast it away
Or else burn it on some altar
Alter my mistakes, my dross, to gold"

The strongest part of the poem in my opinion.