The Least of These - Edit3

[dukealien]

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Hi Duke,

not keen on the rhyming. The tone seems far too jaunty(not to mention the ambiguity of 'through plastic

circuits') and the ending, shorn of the implications of 'test', is a bit 'meh!' (if you'll pardon the technicality).

Best, Knot

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That's how it felt to me, too, but worth a try. Will snap back to blank verse version for next edit, maybe slim it down a bit.