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The Least of These - Edit3

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05-27-2020, 07:07 PM

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Hi Duke,

not keen on the rhyming. The tone seems far too jaunty(not to mention the ambiguity of 'through plastic

circuits') and the ending, shorn of the implications of 'test', is a bit 'meh!' (if you'll pardon the technicality).

Best, Knot

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The Least of These - Edit3 - by dukealien - 05-25-2020, 05:59 AM

RE: The Least of These - by Knot - 05-25-2020, 08:15 PM

RE: The Least of These - Edit - by dukealien - 05-27-2020, 10:46 AM

RE: The Least of These - Edit - by Knot - 05-27-2020, 07:07 PM

RE: The Least of These - Edit - by dukealien - 05-27-2020, 10:31 PM

RE: The Least of These - Edit - by Wjames - 06-01-2020, 10:56 AM

RE: The Least of These - Edit2 - by dukealien - 06-09-2020, 05:09 AM

RE: The Least of These - Edit2 - by Mark A Becker - 06-10-2020, 11:20 AM

RE: The Least of These - Edit2 - by dukealien - 06-14-2020, 05:45 AM

RE: The Least of These - Edit3 - by penneddown - 06-14-2020, 07:01 PM

RE: The Least of These - Edit3 - by dukealien - 06-15-2020, 04:22 AM

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