2020

[Greywolf]

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Here,s an example of an image. Your first line is an image ( simile)


Tower's like broken fingers
reach into a slate grey sky.

The second verse is just the telling of a story void of imagery, (simile or metaphor) as does the last verse.

If you had an image in each verse your poem would improve.
An image is an image, it can be as flowery or as unfollowers as you the writer make it. Beware of cliche, (of crowds that shuffled by) turn it into an image ( of sheep that shuffled by) one word can change a tell (story) to an image. If someone advise you to use more imagery, no need to call them out just google imagery in Google. We also have a some threads in the forum that can explain it, or simply ask in the discussion forum.

Towers like broken fingers
reach into a slate grey sky.
A memory of packed cities
of crowds that shuffled by.

The promise of cold silence
of store fronts now laid bare.
2020 the year of the virus
of emptied streets everywhere.

Tv screens flicker blue
to the box lose your brain.
The media hypes the fear
of the novel Covid strain.

Hi, 

Thank you for taking the time to write this. Like I said I’m new and I didn’t think to put the question in the discussion forum. Your time spent is really appreciated. Thank you for the links. Oh hey Admin. I’m just trying to learn. I was asking questions on how to improve the work. I thought that the questions were relevant to the critique...I meant no ill intent