Last Light

[Greywolf]

I think this poem is lacking emotion in my opinion, also I think you should expand on writing something less cliché. This feels like something I've read before. Let me break this poem down into stanzas.

Stanza 1: I thought it was interesting, nothing special, I've seen better though, you lack some imagery but I still find it interesting to read. Good going.

Stanza 2: What do you mean by a dark abyss yawns cavernous like midnight? What does that mean?

Stanza 3: I don't really understand this line, how what is so special about falling into the starry bliss? it's also a cliché, but other than that it is something to work on.

Overall I thought this poem was kind of dry. Sorry my opinion.

Thank for you sharing, I wish you good luck for this poem.

My dog has cancer. It’s about death and an end to suffering. The abyss is death. Cheers.