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[easywayout]

I think this piece needs work, S1 L2 should be an enjambment, altogether, not put everything letter with a capital, it doesn't make sense, to me that feels like a careless mistake. Also I feel like you should revise this and make it a longer piece, I would love to read this poem like that. So thank you for sharing!

Hi JaggedEdge,

Thanks for commenting.

I may be misunderstanding, but S1L2 does use enjambment (off/summer’s). As you’re the second person to have pointed out the initial caps, it seems they’re getting in the way of people’s reading and I’ll incorporate it into the revision.

I’m too new to poetry to figure out how, or whether, to lengthen this, but I will leave it for a few months and give some thought to whether it could be extended.

Thanks, EWO