04-08-2020, 01:35 PM
I like the rhyme scheme of this poem, it's easy and flows well. However, there are a few things I did not understand.
In L1, you say, eyes green like glass. Do you mean green eyes like glass? Because the former qualifies the glass as being green. I am not sure if that's what you were going for.
You say you do not hear her screams see a look of surprise in her eyes. What is the surprise, and what is causing you regret?
Otherwise, I like the simplicity of the poem.
In L1, you say, eyes green like glass. Do you mean green eyes like glass? Because the former qualifies the glass as being green. I am not sure if that's what you were going for.
You say you do not hear her screams see a look of surprise in her eyes. What is the surprise, and what is causing you regret?
Otherwise, I like the simplicity of the poem.