Mist Encounters

[GMan]

Hi mlea, am new here, so please take this with a pinch of salt or given the shelter-in-place order, a sip of wine.


Upon a misty morning, through predicted dew
I saw a figure shadowed, maybe it was you.
Too shy to step much closer, or to step away
I'm frozen. In decision. Still enough to pray

- love this. perhaps you mean, 'indecision'.

for inner turmoil banished - act now, do not think!
Extend a hand, unfurl a smile. Through mist, a wink
of comprehension. Separate lives can be adhered
And solitude upended. Put to rest the years

- maybe joined (instead of adhered)

of missed intentions. Actions cleaved from thoughts. Unread
designs, unopened notes. Instead. Unwrought. My smile
met not with pleasure. Glance remains unseen. Fragile
attempts stay undercover. Fight dissolves to dream.

- love it. i don't get 'fight dissolves to dream'. what is the meaning here?


I blinked and it was over; cannot make you stay
The place you stood glows empty, morning turned to day.
My heart's a figure lighter, hollowed in my chest
A friendship lost, a path untread. Of mist - unrest.

- this is super ending. of mist - unrest.

overall, i like the fragmentation and sweet and sometimes, emphatic, chop.