04-03-2020, 05:31 AM
I really like the over all feeling of the poem. The two lines after "No one knew my pain" a little redundant. I think that your growth has been being showcased already and the uses of the word overcame again doesn't add too much to the poem. When you say "my path was harder" that reinforce the first four lines of the poem. However I feel like the idea was already communicated well. I really do like the lase four lines of the poem though. Thank you for sharing.