Demons

[Knot]

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Enjoyed the read, str
but I thought it lost it's way in a bit verses three and five.
Might  be worth considering putting it into the present tense,make it a more immediate.


Food for thought.


there are demons in my skin
I tell myself
Forcing me to sin, Wearing me
out and weak and thin
Where every grin is fake
every sob and shake
are lies


I tell myself
I will claw away my hide
flay this fake and pay
Whatever keeps my guilt
to cast it away. Or burn it
on some altar. Alter my mistakes
Turn me into ashes, silence
all my sins, Give me
to the silence,
that Which always wins
and make of my dross, gold




Best, Knot


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