Your Blueberries
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I found this very powerful and raw. The last stanza was excellent and brought it together. I appreciate the simplicity of it and adds to its relatable loss.
The first two stanzas could be combined.

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Last week I saw the container
holding your blueberries.
Only a shriveled handful left
I couldn't throw them out.

Yesterday, our son came by.
He cleaned the fridge.
He filled it with foods
he knows I'll eat.

I open and close it,
and open it again,
but I just don’t see
the only thing I want.
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Messages In This Thread
Your Blueberries - by Mark A Becker - 01-26-2020, 12:56 PM
RE: Your Blueberries - by Knot - 01-26-2020, 11:51 PM
RE: Your Blueberries - by bbcashdollar - 01-27-2020, 04:45 AM
RE: Your Blueberries - by Knot - 08-25-2021, 09:30 PM
RE: Your Blueberries - by Mark A Becker - 01-28-2020, 06:58 AM
RE: Your Blueberries - by Joshua Smith - 01-28-2020, 11:42 AM
RE: Your Blueberries - by Camer028 - 01-31-2020, 01:21 AM
RE: Your Blueberries - by LSClanton - 04-01-2020, 11:00 PM
RE: Your Blueberries - by Gerryswo - 08-20-2021, 04:54 AM
RE: Your Blueberries - by Mark A Becker - 08-25-2021, 04:54 AM
RE: Your Blueberries - by busker - 08-25-2021, 05:13 AM
RE: Your Blueberries - by Mark A Becker - 08-25-2021, 05:48 AM
RE: Your Blueberries - by Tiger the Lion - 08-25-2021, 06:31 AM



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