Mist Encounters
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Upon a misty morning, through predicted dew
I saw a figure shadowed, maybe it was you.
Too shy to step much closer, or to step away
I'm frozen. In decision. Still enough to pray

for inner turmoil banished - act now, do not think!
Extend a hand, unfurl a smile. Through mist, a wink
of comprehension. Separate lives can be adhered
And solitude upended. Put to rest the years

of missed intentions. Actions cleaved from thoughts. Unread
designs, unopened notes. Instead. Unwrought. My smile
met not with pleasure. Glance remains unseen. Fragile
attempts stay undercover. Fight dissolves to dream.

I blinked and it was over; cannot make you stay
The place you stood glows empty, morning turned to day.
My heart's a figure lighter, hollowed in my chest
A friendship lost, a path untread. Of mist - unrest.

EDIT: Thank you for the thoughtful comments and suggestions! Draft 2 is below. I have partially abandoned the formal iambic hexameter structure. Let me know which version you prefer. Thanks! 

Mist Encounters - Second Draft

Another misty morning
Blends to afternoon
Until a haunting figure
Finds me in the gloom.
Too shy to step much closer
Or to step away
I'm frozen in decision
Still enough to pray

For inner turmoil vanquished
Act now, do not think!
Extend a hand, unfurl a smile
Through mist, a wink
Of comprehension
Parted lives can be rejoined
And solitude upended
Put to rest a mind

Of missed intentions
Actions cleaved from thoughts
Unread designs, unopened notes
Instead: unwrought. 
My smile a beat too tardy
Glance remains unseen
Fragile attempts stay undercover
Fight dissolves to dream.

I blinked and it was over
I couldn't make you stay
The space you filled now empty
Fear has won the day.
My heart's a figure lighter
Hollowed in my chest
A friendship lost, a path untread
Of mist: unrest.
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Messages In This Thread
Mist Encounters - by mlea - 03-31-2020, 06:53 AM
RE: Mist Encounters - by Cat - 04-02-2020, 01:31 AM
RE: Mist Encounters - by GMan - 04-06-2020, 05:02 AM
RE: Mist Encounters - by unpolished - 04-07-2020, 09:27 AM
RE: Mist Encounters - by mlea - 04-08-2020, 04:44 AM
RE: Mist Encounters - by Mark A Becker - 04-21-2020, 05:56 AM
RE: Mist Encounters - by ElleEmBea - 04-23-2020, 01:04 AM
RE: Mist Encounters - by CRNDLSM - 11-08-2020, 03:23 PM
RE: Mist Encounters - by mlea - 11-09-2020, 05:52 AM



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