When Winds are High
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(03-28-2020, 06:47 AM)dukealien Wrote:  
(03-27-2020, 09:19 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  When Winds are High

When winds are high and clouds are low
we do not venture from our base.
The sun assumes a muted glow

and seethes that it must simmer slow
and dare not touch a human face.
When winds are high and clouds are low

a zombie's appetite could grow
so he might gobble Time and Space.
The sun assumes a muted glow

and bides its time. And we don't know
with what the gloominess is laced
when winds are high and clouds are low.

So look to spy a coloured bow
however darkened is the case.
The sun assumes a muted glow

and so should we. And boldly go
Nowhere. Not now. Shelter in place
when winds are high and clouds are low
and sun assumes a muted glow.
Enjoyed this very much.  Elegant use of the form, and good choice of it.

(03-27-2020, 09:19 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  When Winds are High

When winds are high and clouds are low
we do not venture from our base.
The sun assumes a muted glow

and seethes that it must simmer slow
and dare not touch a human face.
When winds are high and clouds are low

a zombie's appetite could grow
so he might gobble Time and Space.
The sun assumes a muted glow

and bides its time. And we don't know
with what the gloominess is laced
when winds are high and clouds are low.

So look to spy a coloured bow
however darkened is the case.
The sun assumes a muted glow

and so should we. And boldly go
Nowhere. Not now. Shelter in place
when winds are high and clouds are low
and sun assumes a muted glow.
Thanks Duke. The meter and "natural flow" falls apart in the final tercet, but the awkwardness seemed appropriate to the subject matter. 
Appreciate the read and comments,
Paul
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Messages In This Thread
When Winds are High - by Tiger the Lion - 03-27-2020, 09:19 AM
RE: When Winds are High - by dukealien - 03-28-2020, 06:47 AM
RE: When Winds are High - by Tiger the Lion - 03-31-2020, 02:54 AM
RE: When Winds are High - by Knot - 03-31-2020, 03:26 AM
RE: When Winds are High - by Erthona - 04-01-2020, 05:52 PM
RE: When Winds are High - by Emacskye - 05-09-2020, 07:28 PM



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