Hounds

[Mark A Becker]

Hello there -

This reads like a description of rape, minus extreme emotion- almost as if the N is an impartial observer.

My guess is the dog is a metaphor for the rapist. 

Even if I'm way off base, some tightening is needed... 

Example: a waste of his good will.  A line like this is very confusing to a reader, though it is probably very clear inside your own mind.  The surrounding lines don't add enough clarity (not that I need to be hit between the ears).

Simple subtraction suggestion (no new words of mine):

I resisted so quietly, dragged
into those summer woods like an easy kill,
I wasn’t always this small.
The next man, I’d love him
if he hurt me the least.


Thanks for the read.  Interesting,
Mark