Dim Glow
#4
Hello,
I agree with Dale about making "I am inspired by the absence of light!" the first line. I think the third stanza should come sooner, as this section helps clarify the connections between the rest of the poem, if that makes sense.

This poem is very thought provoking and I think that with more specific organization it will be even more powerful.

Thanks for sharing!
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Dim Glow - by P3t3rW1ll14m - 02-17-2020, 07:10 AM
RE: Dim Glow - by Erthona - 02-17-2020, 01:10 PM
RE: Dim Glow - by P3t3rW1ll14m - 02-18-2020, 04:32 AM
RE: Dim Glow - by magnoliaflower23 - 03-21-2020, 01:49 AM
RE: Dim Glow - by mlea - 03-31-2020, 06:20 AM



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