03-15-2020, 07:32 PM
Knot,
I meant update in terms of idea, not language, although I did excise 'Milquetoast' as it is a little dated. Our N is a fancy man and would use "libation". Hell I use it and I am not a fancy man.
Stream of consciousness is just that, a stream of consciousness. This may not resemble "To the Lighthouse". If you prefer, it is as you've said, a "rambling soliloquy". Stream of consciousness does not have to be a reverie, it can also be a one-sided dialogue. I did address the wife line.
Anyway I did a revision which I think answer a number of problems you pointed out. See what you think.
dale
I meant update in terms of idea, not language, although I did excise 'Milquetoast' as it is a little dated. Our N is a fancy man and would use "libation". Hell I use it and I am not a fancy man.
Stream of consciousness is just that, a stream of consciousness. This may not resemble "To the Lighthouse". If you prefer, it is as you've said, a "rambling soliloquy". Stream of consciousness does not have to be a reverie, it can also be a one-sided dialogue. I did address the wife line.
Anyway I did a revision which I think answer a number of problems you pointed out. See what you think.
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.