I read Prufrock again today

[Knot]

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Hi Dale.

This is stream of conscious, thus the odd non-sequitur.

- Granted, except that it is contrived, considered and capable of being edited. and the 'sequiturs' don't seem so much 'odd' as rhyme driven. Also, Prufrock doesn't change the subject mid verse.

Purely a personal view, but a direct question like 'did you hear I lost my wife', seems to me to implicitly invoke a 3rd person, making this seem less internal

monologue and more rambling soliloquy. (The latter I'm rather fond of).

Yes that's it exactly, he is contradictory and there are little redeeming qualities to this person.

- Then perhaps change the line break?

Still I am no more a prude nor less

and no pride have I;

makes for a much easier/smoother read, or even

Still I am no less nor more a prude

and ...

In Prufrock Elliot speaks to the timidness in men brought on by the modern age, this poem attempts to update that notion.

- I'm not really getting 'update' from this (for instance 'Milquetoast' originates in the 1930s, 'singularity' at its most recent is 1965 or, the more likely usage, from 1893), this 'feels' almost contemporary with the original. Claiming 'post-modern' doesn't make it so.

I would be more interested to hear more of N#s particular concerns, rather than the many echoes of the original. Somewhere out there there's probably a ghastly incel version of Prufrock.

Best, Knot

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