03-14-2020, 01:51 PM
Knot,
Thanks for your nice in depth critique, it was beneficial.
This is stream of conscious, thus the odd non-sequitur.
" 'nor less and no' ? Not following this. It seems to say that N is, precisely, a prude, and one without pride." Yes that's it exactly, he is contradictory and there are little redeeming qualities to this person.
Most of the lines are in relation to his failing relationship, not just his wife but all relationships. He meanders in his thought so he can justify his isolation in order to protect himself.
In Prufrock Elliot speaks to the timidness in men brought on by the modern age, this poem attempts to update that notion.
Regardless, thanks for your help, there are definitely things that need correction.
dale
Thanks for your nice in depth critique, it was beneficial.
This is stream of conscious, thus the odd non-sequitur.
" 'nor less and no' ? Not following this. It seems to say that N is, precisely, a prude, and one without pride." Yes that's it exactly, he is contradictory and there are little redeeming qualities to this person.
Most of the lines are in relation to his failing relationship, not just his wife but all relationships. He meanders in his thought so he can justify his isolation in order to protect himself.
In Prufrock Elliot speaks to the timidness in men brought on by the modern age, this poem attempts to update that notion.
Regardless, thanks for your help, there are definitely things that need correction.
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.