02-26-2020, 09:37 PM
My thanks to Erthona and JaggedEdge for their feedback.
To begin learning about meter, I consulted the Forum's link to "Info, Suggestions, Poetic Devices, Help", and I realized the most of my poem's lines had eight "feet" (syllables). There were three, however, with only seven. I've reworked these to give the version below that has only lines with eight.
Spread your wings swift, mighty eagle
And from your nest of birth take flight.
Spiral up toward realms of glory,
Mirroring strong the dawn's new light.
Look to every wildly wild dream
And aim to conquer cosmic space.
Glide through times of now and future,
Enduring all with style and grace.
Build your strength, resolve and wisdom.
Tame the winds of trial, snares and strife.
Touch each torch of those perched earthbound;
Hold those burning true, clear and bright.
Regarding cliches:
I'm reminded of my college English composition class, in which my assignments were panned more than once for transgressions against good writing. One in particular was flagged for inappropriately including a cliche, of which I was totally unaware. I may well be doing the same in my poem, but consulting a couple of web resources (prowritingaid.com and clichelist.net) hasn't helped find the problem.
To begin learning about meter, I consulted the Forum's link to "Info, Suggestions, Poetic Devices, Help", and I realized the most of my poem's lines had eight "feet" (syllables). There were three, however, with only seven. I've reworked these to give the version below that has only lines with eight.
Spread your wings swift, mighty eagle
And from your nest of birth take flight.
Spiral up toward realms of glory,
Mirroring strong the dawn's new light.
Look to every wildly wild dream
And aim to conquer cosmic space.
Glide through times of now and future,
Enduring all with style and grace.
Build your strength, resolve and wisdom.
Tame the winds of trial, snares and strife.
Touch each torch of those perched earthbound;
Hold those burning true, clear and bright.
Regarding cliches:
I'm reminded of my college English composition class, in which my assignments were panned more than once for transgressions against good writing. One in particular was flagged for inappropriately including a cliche, of which I was totally unaware. I may well be doing the same in my poem, but consulting a couple of web resources (prowritingaid.com and clichelist.net) hasn't helped find the problem.