02-17-2020, 01:10 PM
Probably this should be one sentence:
"They try to stay strong while standing on one leg.
Denying balance and believing that
light equates to goodness so as darkness does to evil."
Poetrywise this does a fair amount of telling and little showing. Telling generally is not as compelling unless one wants to write philosophy.
I enjoyed the line "I am inspired by the absence of light!". It might be a good line to start a poem.
best,
dale
"They try to stay strong while standing on one leg.
Denying balance and believing that
light equates to goodness so as darkness does to evil."
Poetrywise this does a fair amount of telling and little showing. Telling generally is not as compelling unless one wants to write philosophy.
I enjoyed the line "I am inspired by the absence of light!". It might be a good line to start a poem.
best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.