Dim Glow
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Probably this should be one sentence:

"They try to stay strong while standing on one leg.
Denying balance and believing that
light equates to goodness so as darkness does to evil."

Poetrywise this does a fair amount of telling and little showing. Telling generally is not as compelling unless one wants to write philosophy.

I enjoyed the line "I am inspired by the absence of light!". It might be a good line to start a poem.

best,

dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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Dim Glow - by P3t3rW1ll14m - 02-17-2020, 07:10 AM
RE: Dim Glow - by Erthona - 02-17-2020, 01:10 PM
RE: Dim Glow - by P3t3rW1ll14m - 02-18-2020, 04:32 AM
RE: Dim Glow - by magnoliaflower23 - 03-21-2020, 01:49 AM
RE: Dim Glow - by mlea - 03-31-2020, 06:20 AM



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