01-18-2020, 06:36 AM
I am partial to poems like this that are simply sweet and yet brings the point easily to the reader.
I have a few suggestions to consider or not...
I'd rather be compared to a good book, rather than an old one.
In poetry an old rule still applies...show, don't tell, 2nd verse -- what makes her
beauty divine--does she look like an angel, how is she magnificent, in what way?
Just a little more elaboration for the reader could polish this little gem, I also would
like to see a title that would draw the reader in to this lovely infatuation.
I enjoyed the piece.
I have a few suggestions to consider or not...
I'd rather be compared to a good book, rather than an old one.
In poetry an old rule still applies...show, don't tell, 2nd verse -- what makes her
beauty divine--does she look like an angel, how is she magnificent, in what way?
Just a little more elaboration for the reader could polish this little gem, I also would
like to see a title that would draw the reader in to this lovely infatuation.
I enjoyed the piece.