Her gracefulness

Her gracefulness

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01-14-2020, 05:20 AM

Beautiful! I am new to poetry (novel writer) so I may not have the best advice!

Like someone else mentioned above, using the word mine twice throws me off a little. Perhaps rephrase so you could use the word met instead.

Wonderful work! Makes me wish I was as lucky as the girl being referenced to.

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Her gracefulness - by Sonata - 01-11-2013, 08:18 AM

RE: Her gracefulness - by Fathima - 01-11-2013, 08:22 AM

RE: Her gracefulness - by Sonata - 01-11-2013, 08:34 AM

RE: Her gracefulness - by billy - 01-11-2013, 09:29 AM

RE: Her gracefulness - by BennyBoy - 01-11-2013, 09:02 AM

RE: Her gracefulness - by arbil_poieo - 01-11-2013, 12:41 PM

RE: Her gracefulness - by Dcandy925 - 09-10-2017, 06:59 AM

RE: Her gracefulness - by talktalk - 09-29-2017, 01:57 PM

RE: Her gracefulness - by ClaireLou - 09-29-2017, 09:06 PM

RE: Her gracefulness - by Huckleberry - 10-02-2017, 07:01 PM

RE: Her gracefulness - by OutofmycomfortZone - 01-14-2020, 05:20 AM

RE: Her gracefulness - by Knot - 01-17-2020, 10:10 PM

RE: Her gracefulness - by audrey - 01-18-2020, 06:36 AM

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