Generation Next

[billy]

hi embee and welcome.

i had to look up shtetles [always good to learn something new]
not a lot i can see i'd want changing. a couple of excess words and the last line stood out as unneeded. everything we need is in the body of the poem which i enjoyed reading specially the lack of cliche.

Hello, 
I'm a newbie. However, no need to be too gentile and kind... :-) 

Thanks for any and all help. 

Generation Next 

I am a prayer,risen needs a space between the two last words.
from tattooed numbers is [from needed]?
burned blue into the future. 
Auschwitz and Dachau,
Europes's shtetles and D.P. camps. 
Death inhaled from grey ashes. 

I am the scarred remnants, 
burdened with life, 
attached by birth to burial 
grounds, fragile memorials
bone mountains. some solid imagery.

Kneeling on holy ground, 
stilled breath, smoky air, 
I carry the hallowed memories
into generation next. 

Blessed. Cursed. Eternal. not sure this line add anything, the poem shows a better image.