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Cool (edit 4)
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12-11-2019, 11:53 AM
Really love what you've done with the first stanza. Three lines of short vowels in polysyllabic gerund phrases start us off all lilting and passive, then, boom! four strong short words (two iamb, complete with long vowels on the stressed syllables, ) make the first strong declarative statement of the poem. You have shifted our gears, and we are ready to fly. Nicely done!
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Cool (edit 4) - by bbcashdollar - 12-07-2019, 01:09 AM
RE: Cool - by bbcashdollar - 12-09-2019, 08:39 PM
RE: Cool (edit 2) - by Vikiirna - 12-10-2019, 03:20 PM
RE: Cool (edit 2) - by bbcashdollar - 12-10-2019, 07:48 PM
RE: Cool (edit 3- Our Rites) - by Vikiirna - 12-11-2019, 11:53 AM
RE: Cool (edit 3- Our Rites) - by Knot - 12-11-2019, 11:52 PM
RE: Cool (edit 3- Our Rites) - by audrey - 01-17-2020, 08:18 AM
RE: Cool (edit 3- Our Rites) - by bbcashdollar - 01-22-2020, 03:48 AM
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