Old Flame - edit 1 (Formerly Faint Hope)

[Wjames]

Hey WJ. A quick thought on first read...

A sliver remains,
the final slice of pie 
at the back of your fridge
beside a jar of pickles
you got the week you moved in. 

The crust is soggy and the taste's dulled, I think this line belongs in future tense since you are describing the last slice which is yet to be eaten
- consider... the crust will be soggy and the taste dulled
but it's nice to know something's there
if you feel like something sweet. 

Thanks for the read. I'll be back.

Thanks tiger, I'm leaning towards making your suggestion.

The one thing making me hesitate is I want the pie to be perishable, it's a faint hope and it's going to go bad soon - if it will be soggy etc it implies it may be there forever.

I think I need to establish that perishability some way and then make your suggestion. 

Glad to see this place is still kicking, I'll try to return more often, but time is hard to reckon with.