10-13-2019, 08:25 PM
I would say it is quite an original poem, that comparison between a person and the lemon drop really took me by surprise, and then how you explain a little bit that comparison mentioning the words bitter and sweet, as to say, that the person has got a duality, or at least that is what I think you want to say. I also have to say the the stanzas in the middle are a bit difficult to understand, but I think I get the feeling of what you are saying, and that´s the important thing, get the feeling. So great job, really, this is the kind of poems I want to read, something original that surprises me.