10-10-2019, 04:41 AM
I enjoy the first part very much, in italics, and think there could be even more contrast between the awakening into a prison cell and out of a pleasant dream and observation. Maybe describing the prison cell more, adding more "he," as in describing what "he" is doing and "his" thoughts are after he stumbles. It goes from concrete imagery to very abstract. Nevertheless, I see that the prison cell is the wood and that ties the title in nicely. But should there also be a clear solace found at the end? Maybe not.