Finite Days

[Richard]

Hey Alex,
My biggest two suggestions would be to rewrite this without the repetition and to use more images. Repeating words or phrases is okay, but it's a bit overdone here. I'll go into more detail below:

This is my first poem I’m posting on here. Not really sure what my goal is but let me know what you like and what you don’t like.


There are days filled with sorrow, and days filled with pain, -Why not use an image of a day filled with pain? This is too vague to capture the reader's attention.
There are days without sunshine, and days of constant rain,
There are days I ask for forgiveness, and days I hide in shame,
There are days when I’m alone, and days where I’m to blame,
For all the nasty curses, they all throw on my name, -Why are people cursing the speaker's name? Again, this is too vague. Think about using more images to draw the reader in.
There are days I wish were different, I know you’ve felt the same,
There are days filled with happiness, and days filled with joy,
There are days where I feel complete, like when I was a boy,
And all the struggles in the world, never got me down,
I would run, play, kick, scream, without feeling like a clown,
There are days upon days that make up our life,
There are days upon days that add to all the strife,
There are days that are good, and days that are bad,
Always remember to cherish the days that are to be had.
ALEXTHEASIAN21

As for the rhyming, I think it would be a worthwhile poetic exercise to rewrite this without rhyming. The rhyme here isn't the strongest, and I'm betting you could get to something more interesting if you didn't handcuff yourself with rhymes. 

I do think you have some genuine emotion here, which is always a good place to start with a poem. I look forward to seeing where you take this piece from here.

Cheers,
Richard