Finite Days

[AlexTheAsian21]

There are days filled with sorrow, and days filled with pain,
There are days without sunshine, and days of constant rain,
There are days I ask for forgiveness, and days I hide in shame,
There are days when I’m alone, and days where I’m to blame,
For all the nasty curses, they all throw on my name,
There are days I wish were different, I know you’ve felt the same,
There are days filled with happiness, and days filled with joy,
There are days where I feel complete, like when I was a boy,
And all the struggles in the world, never got me down,
I would run, play, kick, scream, without feeling like a clown,
There are days upon days that make up our life,
There are days upon days that add to all the strife,
There are days that are good, and days that are bad,
Always remember to cherish the days that are to be had.

Hello, and welcome to the site. I'll just bring out a few little technical points, and leave most of the content commentary for some other members.

I do enjoy some good rhyme, but you need to be careful not to rely on simple rhymes. Get creative, use some more unusual words for the end rhyme, and you might find that the poem sounds more pleasant.

I'm not always such an opponent of first-line-capped, but in this case, I definitely think this poem should not capitalize each line.

The rhythm and comma placement make for an noticeable sense of contrast, but many lines don't really present strong opposites (if at all) from left to right. I'd really like to see more contrast like you can see in lines 2 and 6.

I'll hold off any more for now and let others offer in their input, and perhaps touch upon anything that goes unsaid a little later.

Thanks tremendously for the feedback, please feel free not to hold back. As this is art I feel like every perspective opens my mind up to a view I’ve never thought to look at. I really appreciate the focused thoughts and detail you used when critiquing my work. This is my revision based on your review. Thoughts?
Poems Edits- Finite Days
There are days filled with sorrow, and days without power,
there are days without sunshine, and days of constant shower,
there are days I ask for forgiveness, and days I hide in shame,
there are days when I’m alone, and days where I’m to blame,
for all the nasty curses, they all throw on my soul,
there are days where I feel empty, days I wish were whole,
there are days filled with happiness, and days with endless joy,
there are days where I feel complete, like when I was a boy,
and all the struggles in the world, never affected my tune,
I’d run, play, kick, scream, and never feel like a buffoon,
there are days upon days that make up our spirit,
there are days upon days that we desperately need to hear it,
there are days that are good, and days that are bad,
always remember to cherish the days that are to be had.