09-10-2019, 10:37 PM
Hi,
Thanks so much- I have shown this to a couple of friends but of course they only have 'nice' things to say. The story it tells is personal so it is hard to leave out everything that feels 'necessary'. However i will definitely re- do the beginning as its a slightly disjointed bit of the story.
I agree about the center alignment- I haven't written anything since school so it hadn't occurred to me at all about that.
I'm going to try and detach from the emotion and personal meaning to make it more readable to an outsider- to the people involved it would make perfect sense.
The theme of the inner child is important. Its about two people who meet and their love grows because they are able to heal each others 'mother wounds'. They would do drugs together to escape and stay in the rabbit hole for days just avoiding their pain. Then he cheated on me.
I really appreciate your feedback as its given me a starting point to develop something!
Thanks so much- I have shown this to a couple of friends but of course they only have 'nice' things to say. The story it tells is personal so it is hard to leave out everything that feels 'necessary'. However i will definitely re- do the beginning as its a slightly disjointed bit of the story.
I agree about the center alignment- I haven't written anything since school so it hadn't occurred to me at all about that.
I'm going to try and detach from the emotion and personal meaning to make it more readable to an outsider- to the people involved it would make perfect sense.
The theme of the inner child is important. Its about two people who meet and their love grows because they are able to heal each others 'mother wounds'. They would do drugs together to escape and stay in the rabbit hole for days just avoiding their pain. Then he cheated on me.
I really appreciate your feedback as its given me a starting point to develop something!