She Said.

[Knot]

 With ‘deer’ and ‘stood still’, I was hoping they’d give off the same meaning - they’re both deers in his exes sight.

Why not use the phrase to apply to both?

Outside, in the falling snow
he saw someone standing
frozen like a sighted deer
he sat ...


re 'expanding' - it's much easier to edit down than add, so expand as much as you can, then worry about what happens next

Best, Knot




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