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08-31-2019, 02:25 AM

Thanks for the feedback Weeded, I agree that is a filler element in the 2nd, 3rd stanza's I'll definitely try and convey those ideas in a more interesting tone. I re-worded the second in hopes it is a little more interesting.
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First Day - by Bunx - 08-30-2019, 02:59 AM

RE: First Day - by Weeded - 08-30-2019, 05:31 AM

RE: First Day - by Bunx - 08-31-2019, 02:25 AM

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