Overthinking

[ginaparaoan]

Thanks for taking time to read and for giving your feedback. I'm taking my time with poetry. I am not really qualified to give an intensive feedback. I bought myself a poetry book "The Best British Poetry 2011", and I found that really it's difficult to read a poem. Sometimes we struggle to find the meaning -- our own meaning, not the poet's. But that is the beauty of it -- that it can have different meaning for different people. Poetry is not something I do for a career, but I do it to make my free time meaningful. I hope to get better at it, and that is why I am thankful for your comments. 

First, I like your attitude.  It’s difficult for us to separate our feelings from our work sometimes, but it’s also necessary for us to learn.  Your going to get a lot of suggestions don’t try to incorporate them all - pick and choose what sounds good to you. 

Second, I like that you’re using description  - not exposition - to get images and conclusions across to the reader.  You’ve a head start but on other ‘beginners ‘.

So just a thought - sometimes one word can do the work of several  - like daywalker. Early in the poem it will be misleading - people will think your poem is about the occult. But it would accurately convey the appearance of a tired person , and you could have revealing to the reader that your poem is not about a vampire who can walk in the sunlight, but is describing the physical effects of someone who suffers from overthinking.

Look forward to working with you.