Never Again

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Let me just say this.. THIS WAS AMAZING. Mind BLOWING! I was intrigued by the title and I didn't know what I was in for. I am speechless! But I can say that this poem was not only powerful but full of such truth. I love that you continue to put " Seventeen lives, Seventeen bullets, Never again." after almost each stanza. It made me actually feel what the victims felt in this poem. It was like a bullet just pushing deeper and deeper into my chest. I also agree with billy that certain parts get a little wordy. Because trying to rhyme almost everything CAN be a challenge but you're very good I know you can work your way around it. I also agree with UselessBlueprint that you use "kids" a lot, and that it erases their cause and their fight. You can use students like he suggested or even families. Or use all three ? (kids, students, families in different stanzas ) But I'm very proud to say that you made me FEEL this poem as if I was there. Again, very amazing poem.