08-09-2019, 11:31 AM
From what I can tell about your poems you've posted so far, I can see you really love to write about elements. I love this line here: " But as my dance grew more elaborate, the flames began to whisper, spilling freshly brewed secrets" As if you're embodying the flames, letting it manipulate you. I agree with Knot, and Seraphim. This has much potential and I cannot wait to see the finished version! I'll be waiting for another poem by you, I'm drawn in.
- MindlMatter