De profundis (final)

[busker]

The theme works, but wouldn't 'Red, malachite, and gold' need to change to 'August Blue'?

Thanks for the comments, Knot
I think the allusion can be a loose one.
Tuke has loads of paintings featuring bathers on boats
To be clear, there’s no reason why OW would be talking about a Tuke painting in a poem to the darling boy. The allusion is for the reader, not the supposed receiver. At least, that’s how I see it

I think your also right in that the revision lacks something that the original has.
Oh well..::