Stargazing

[nozaki]

STARGAZING
 
A heartbeat at a shadow
A thousand years of a lifetime
Blank eyes at space
Glinting at colliding stellar atoms I think you have some interesting images here, but the impact is lessened because they're so spare and the connections are only in theme. 
 
Star shoots
From an unknown birthplace
Not finding a celestial manger
Settles its feet to the earth like this stanza, but could benefit from some punctuation. this makes me think of an orphaned star. 
 
Icy planet in transit
Walking by to end a terrestrial affair
Solar flares blowing up
A mountain of stardust don't see what the last two lines have to do with the first two. I think more could be done with the dualism between the sky and earth. 
 
Sleeping in a vacuum
On a black fabric
Dotted with constellations
Waiting for a star to shoot up
And remain

i think you have some great ideas and images here- my advice would be to provide more movement (not necessarily narrative) to the poem, since as of now it feels quite static and piece-y. good luck, looking forward to an edit if you're planning on one!